WRITTEN BARS ARE A STARTING POINT, NOT A SCRIPT
Freestyle bars come back loose and punchy on purpose: short phrases, heavy internal rhyme, first person. That is the register that sounds natural said out loud, and it is deliberately easier to edit than a tightly-structured verse.
Read them aloud before you keep any of them. Lines that look fine on screen often trip the tongue, and the ones you stumble over are the ones to cut — not because they are badly written, but because a bar you cannot say is a bar you cannot use.

